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One of the most useful things I can do for a child preparing for the 11+ writing paper is to help them understand something that is rarely explained directly: what the person marking their work is actually looking for.
Examiners are not mysterious. They are experienced teachers and educators who read hundreds of scripts in a short period of time. They are looking for specific qualities – qualities that can be taught, practised, and reliably produced under exam conditions. Knowing what those qualities are, and understanding what they look like on the page, changes everything about how a child approaches the task.
This post sets out what 11+ examiners are looking for in a writing paper – and what distinguishes a script that gets noticed from one that gets passed over.
First: What Examiners Are Not Looking for
It is worth starting here, because many of the things children have been told to do in writing – by well-meaning teachers and tutors – are not actually what selective school examiners value most.
They are not looking for the longest piece. A shorter, well-crafted piece of writing will always outscore a longer, rambling one. Length is not a proxy for quality.
They are not looking for the most sophisticated vocabulary. A child who scatters ambitious words around without precision – using “melancholy” when they mean “sad”, or “endeavour” when they mean “try”, in ways that feel forced – will not impress an examiner. Natural, precise language is far more valued than performed vocabulary.
They are not looking for a perfect story with a clever twist ending. Plot is far less important than most children think. A piece of writing with a simple, clear premise but beautiful execution will outscore a complicated story told clumsily.
And they are not looking for error-free writing. Of course technical accuracy matters – I will come to that – but a script with a few spelling errors and genuine flair will score higher than a technically immaculate but lifeless piece.
What they are looking for is something harder to fake and more rewarding to develop. Let me go through it.
1. A Confident, Committed Opening
Examiners read a great many scripts. A child who opens with purpose – who begins with a sentence that creates immediate atmosphere, establishes a voice, or makes the reader curious – stands out from the very first line.
What this does not mean is a dramatic or gimmicky opening for its own sake. It means an opening that knows what it is doing. That commits to a tone, a setting, a feeling, a question. That makes the examiner want to read on.
Common openings that weaken a script: “One day…” / “It was a dark and stormy night…” / “In this piece I will…” / Starting with the character waking up. These are the openings of a child who does not yet know what they want to do with the task.
Strong openings drop the reader into something already in motion. They trust the reader to catch up. They feel like the beginning of something worth reading.
2. Structure and Shape
A piece of writing that has a clear shape – that moves with purpose from beginning to middle to end – tells an examiner immediately that there is a thinking mind behind it.
Structure does not mean a beginning, middle and end in the most mechanical sense. It means that the piece goes somewhere. That it builds, or deepens, or shifts. That the ending feels earned rather than simply arrived at because time ran out.
Many children write in a straight line – one thing after another, until they stop. The best scripts have a shape that was planned before the first word was written. Even two or three minutes of planning at the start of the exam – a quick sketch of what the piece will do and where it will go – makes a significant difference to the final result.
I always encourage children to plan before they write. Not a detailed outline, but a clear sense of: what is this piece doing, and how does it end?
3. Precise, Varied Language
Examiners notice language. Specifically, they notice when a child makes a precise and interesting choice – and when they settle for something vague or repetitive.
Precise language does not mean long or unusual words. It means the right word for this thing, in this moment. “The door creaked” is more precise than “the door made a noise.” “She glanced at him” is more precise than “she looked at him.” These are simple words, but they are specific. Specificity is what creates vivid writing.
Varied language means that sentences are not all the same length, all the same shape. Short sentences create pace and tension. Longer sentences build atmosphere and develop ideas. A child who has only one sentence type – regardless of how correct those sentences are – produces writing that feels flat.
The best way to develop both precision and variety is wide, consistent reading. Children absorb the rhythms and choices of good writers through reading, in ways that cannot be fully replicated through instruction alone.
4. Voice
This is the quality examiners most frequently cite when they describe a script that has moved them – that has genuinely impressed them – and it is also the hardest to define.
Voice is the sense that a real person wrote this. That behind the words there is an individual – someone with a particular way of seeing, a particular relationship with language, a particular sensibility. It is the opposite of generic writing: writing that could have been produced by anyone and therefore feels as though it was produced by no one.
Voice develops through practice and through reading. It cannot be put on. A child who tries to sound impressive, rather than expressing what they genuinely want to say, will produce writing that sounds strained. A child who writes from a real place – who has an actual response to the prompt, however simple – will produce writing that feels alive.
One of the things I work on most consistently with children is helping them find and trust their own voice. For bilingual children and those from international families, this can sometimes require additional support – not because their voice is lesser, but because they may be less confident that their way of using language is the right one. It always is.
5. A Sense of the Reader
The best writing at 11+ level – the writing that earns the highest marks – is writing that is aware of its reader. That makes choices in service of the reading experience. That thinks about what the reader will feel at each moment, and arranges words and images and structure accordingly.
This is a sophisticated skill, and it is one that many adults do not fully develop. But children can begin to access it much earlier than we sometimes assume, and when they do, their writing shifts significantly.
I teach this through a simple question I ask constantly in lessons: what do you want your reader to feel here? Not what do you want to say – what do you want them to feel? The shift from the first to the second is the shift from self-expression to genuine writing.
6. Technical Accuracy – in Its Proper Place
Grammar, spelling and punctuation matter. Consistent errors – particularly errors that affect meaning or readability – will affect how a script is received. A child who cannot punctuate dialogue, who consistently confuses homophones, or whose sentences regularly run together without control, will be marked down.
But technical accuracy is a threshold requirement, not the primary differentiator. Above a certain level of competence – and most children who are genuinely preparing for selective school entry will be at or above that level – what separates scripts is the qualities above: voice, structure, precision, reader-awareness. Technical accuracy is necessary but not sufficient.
I teach grammar and punctuation in the context of real writing, always. A child who understands why a sentence needs a full stop, or how a comma changes the pace of a sentence, will remember that understanding far longer than one who has completed a grammar worksheet.
What This Means for Preparation
Understanding what examiners are looking for changes how a child should prepare.
It means reading widely and deeply, so that voice and vocabulary develop naturally. It means practising planning before writing, so that structure becomes habitual. It means writing regularly under timed conditions, so that the exam itself does not feel alien. And it means working with someone who can give specific, honest, encouraging feedback on each draft – feedback that is oriented towards these qualities, not just towards surface errors.
The children I work with who make the greatest progress are those who begin this preparation early – at least 18 months before their exam – and who approach it steadily. Writing confidence is not built in a rush. But it is absolutely built, with the right support.
A Final Word
The 11+ writing paper is not a test of whether a child is a natural writer. It is a test of whether they have developed the skills that good writing requires – and those skills are teachable. Every child I have worked with has improved. The question is always simply where they are starting from and how much time we have.
If you would like to discuss preparing your child for the 11+ writing paper, I would be very glad to hear from you.
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